I appreciated your work. The ideal of a courting woman caffeinated/uncaffeinated persona is excellent. However I suggest you do it over and re-stage the scene. If I done this myself. I might show humorously how the caffeinated part of her personality may be problematic to her boyfriend. I might have them sitting down at a cafe. She had two or more coffee cups near her. He having just one. His emotions shows she is irritating him due to maybe, that java. And then she says the line, " I would like you to get to know..." Her dog on leash is lying near their table covering his eyes in embarrassment of his owner. Well, it just a thought, good success to your creative career.
2 Comments:
: )
I appreciated your work. The ideal of a courting woman caffeinated/uncaffeinated persona is excellent. However I suggest you do it over and re-stage the scene.
If I done this myself. I might show humorously how the caffeinated part of her personality may be problematic to her boyfriend. I might have them sitting down at a cafe. She had two or more coffee cups near her. He having just one. His emotions shows she is irritating him due to maybe, that java. And then she says the line, " I would like you to get to know..." Her dog on leash is lying near their table covering his eyes in embarrassment of his owner. Well, it just a thought, good success to your creative career.
Post a Comment
<< Home